Tutor Report Form
Student name:
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Sylvia Philpot
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Student number:
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503311
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Course/Module title:
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Painting 2: Exploring Concepts
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Assignment number:
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4
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Overall Comments
Thank you for forwarding the
work for your fourth assignment, together with the preliminary work and your
work for the exercises. I still have to access your blog through the
OCA site to read your learning log notes and research but this has not been a
problem. You continue to work
consistently through the course work and it is clear that you are devoting the
required amount of time to your course.
Feedback on assignment
I am glad to hear that you
enjoyed the exercise in abstracting from form and found this a useful technique
to explore abstract ideas. Your two
paintings have been successful in flattening space and it is interesting to see
the contrast between abstraction into curvilinear and rectilinear shapes.
Francis
Campbell Boileau Cadell The Blue Fan
- Scottish National
Gallery of Modern Art
In the first, it is still possible to
recognise the form of the objects, especially the blue bird and the red
fabric. Did you consider turning the
painting around to view it another way, such as upside down, as a way to avoid
recognition of the objects? What do you
think of the balance of colour throughout?
I think you would appreciate the flattened still life paintings of F C B
Cadell, such as ‘The Blue Fan’. In the
rectilinear
Francis
Campbell Boileau Cadell The Blue Fan
abstracted painting, it is not clear why you would want the three
black marks to be read as people when you are trying to abstract the
image.
The brief for abstracting
near and far asked you to ensure that there is no illusory space, but your
painterly treatment of the landscape, and especially the perspective of the
rows in the field, gives a real sense of depth to your painting. Perhaps if you had used the same colour
palette for the near objects as you used for the area outside, this may have
made it easier to combine the forms of the still life with the view from the
window? What do you think? You have
resolved this more in the second painting in watercolour and ink, where the
echoing of the circular shapes creates a link between the different areas of
the painting to flatten the space. What
influenced your choice of colour palette in the horizontal bands of colour?
The abstraction of your
grandson’s head has been successful in losing the form and you have been able
to move away from recognisable features.
The problem with a photograph is that the colours are not nearly so
strong and bright in the actual painting as they are in your blog. This changes the balance of the composition,
especially the arc of turquoise green marks at the upper left, which can barely
be seen in the actual painting.
Your seascape influenced by
Patrick Heron and Terry Frost is painterly rather than simplified into basic
shapes, which produces a recognisable image but I like the way in which you
have created such a vertiginous feeling of looking over a cliff.
Your A3
hard-edge painting is rather derivative of the work of Malevich and it is clear
that you carried out a lot of research into his work. Did you experiment with colour as suggested to investigate the
interaction of colours, such as juxtaposing complementaries or using adjacent
colours to create harmony? Look at the
series of paintings by Josef Albers in his Homage to the Square, such as ‘On an
Early Sky’ to see how the paintings are transformed by the juxtaposition of
colours. You have been very successful
in achieving a flat surface, avoiding the visibility of brush strokes, and
although you say you had difficulty with the masking tape on the paper, your
attempt at this technique of painting is good.
In your painting of
hard-edge abstract expressionism, I am not convinced that the yellow was a
strong enough colour for the ground as the colour in the actual painting is not
nearly as saturated as in the photograph in your blog. Although you felt that this particular image
worked best without the addition of any marks in oil pastel, I would like you
to try this experiment to explore what can be achieved. The painting by Richard Liley in the course
book exploits the addition of this media to add energy and movement into the
work, making it more expressive than it would have been without the addition of
these marks.
In your preliminary work for the ‘Winter’ painting,
the exercise in working from a photograph has been very good in capturing the
rain, due to the directional marks in pastel and your use of the grey paper as
a ground helped to convey mood and atmosphere.
I like your idea of simplifying the shapes of raindrops on glass, but
the background in the photograph is blue and in reality this is untouched white
paper. Can you see how this changes the
mood of the painting and why it is difficult for a tutor to judge work and
offer effective feedback from photographs alone? Look at ‘Gamma Epsilon’ by Morris Louis to see his approach to
using hard-edge colour shapes on a white support.
Your watercolour study of
trees is also not as vividly coloured in reality as in the blog photographs,
which means that the trees do not stand out as much against the
background. The white oil pastel on the
tree trunks has been a good addition, as this adds the suggestion of the
texture of snow blown against the trees.
In your series of studies for this exercise, the study of the field
running towards the trees in the distance is the most expressive. As soon as you add the building, you are
tempted to add detail and move away from abstraction.
You listened to Vivaldi’s
winter music and you did well in such a short time to use marks and colour
effectively to convey the season. You
are correct in observing that one of the most important lessons to learn in
abstraction is when to stop, and I agree that you made the correct decision on
this painting.
In the ‘Winter’ painting for
your seasons series, it is good to see you follow your concept through to this
season. It was very good timing that
you reached this following on the section on abstraction, which enabled you to
take what you had learned into the final painting. I am glad that you acknowledged the problem of trying to combine
hard-edge flat painting with a more painterly approach in the same image, as
this is very difficult to get right and I found that this created a sense of
space in your painting, dividing it into an abstract interior and a more
representational view through a frosted window. Your notes help to explain your thinking about the symbolic
meaning of the colours you used, but although you imitated the red used by
Malevich it is not clear why you chose this particular colour. Although you say that you wanted to use a
warm colour, did you consider using orange as the complementary of the blue you
used in the exterior space?
I am glad that you were able
to experiment with different styles and techniques in each of your seasonal
paintings, and you will have learned a great deal about different painting
styles from this process. It does not
matter if the four paintings cannot be seen as a polyptych, as it is expected
that each student should take their own individual approach to this extended
project.
Sketchbooks
The
photographs of your sketchbook work in your blog are enough to confirm that you
continue to develop this element of your work and there is no need to send the
actual book to me with the assignment work.
Learning logs/critical
essays
The
folders in your blog are rather confusing, as I expected all the work for
Assignment 4 to be in the folder marked ‘Assignment 4’, but this only included
your comments on the first two exercises.
I had to search for the other notes on your work and traced all of it to
the folder marked ‘Abstraction’. I’m
sure you must have carried out the research into Terry Frost, Patrick Heron and
Ben Nicholson because you are always thorough, but I can’t find this flagged up
anywhere in your blog. For assessment,
you should make the contents list very clear and avoid a situation where the
assessors have to search around for the relevant notes.
Suggested
reading/viewing
For the next assignment dealing with abstract
expressionism, I hope that you will take the opportunity to experiment as
boldly as possible in mixed media. Be
prepared to look wider than the artists named in the course book for your
research, such as the work of Lee Krasner in examples like ‘Towards One’.
Please let me know about any particular artists in whom you are interested, to
enable me to suggest other similar artists for your research.
Pointers for the next
assignment
Please
do not use shredded paper as packing material as this creates quite a mess when
unpacked and you should certainly not do this when sending your work for
assessment. You
must remember to put your name and student number on the back of each
piece of work. I try to avoid opening
more than one student assignment at a time, but this will not be the case
during the assessment process and you should not risk the misplacement of any
of your work. For the fifth and final
assignment you should send me the two paintings completed for ‘Your Own Work’,
together with the best four exercises from the experimenting section and the
remainder of the work can be uploaded to your blog with your comments. I will suggest a target date of 31st
August for Assignment 5, which should help you to meet the submission dates for
the November assessment, but if you have any difficulty with this suggested
timetable, please let me know.
Tutor name:
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Jane Mitchell
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Date
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29th May 2012
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Next assignment due
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31st August 2012
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